pooped out a poem

[Father Heathen]

our kings and heroes are now dust and bones
and the jesters lay claim to the thrones
tightly they cling to their scepters and crowns
as the charnal carts make their rounds
to collect the remnants of our humanity
beneath the sky, funeral pyres smolder
beneath the ground, vain sacrifices molder
in a sea of countless faces, yet all alone
we see through eyes that are not our own
to spectate and bear witness to the calamity

 

[Revoltingest]

Fitting thread title.

Just kidding (mostly)!

 

[lostwanderingsoul]

I would call it a real stinker.

 

[Brickjectivity]

dreamed I watched myself reading news
from behind me I grew in mind
I swooned at my own moon
like a man in space in a can

I was in sync with my psp but died
and I alive survived to retry
waving my flag at full noon
when somebody said something

there was a little person on tv
who said I was unethical
a channel change was imminent
such ideas in my mind

 

[Revoltingest]

This is how to write a politically themed poem....

The thing that most frightened old Putin,
ain't nuclear bombs we'd be shoot'n.
We Yanks were no threat.
Canucks made him sweat.
He had no defense against poutine.

 

[Father Heathen]

Fitting thread title.

Just kidding (mostly)!

Any constructive criticism, then?

 

[Revoltingest]

Any constructive criticism, then?

Caution: I do only doggerel.
My advice is worth what you paid for it.

If you go for rhyming in poetry, tis best if
it's consistent, ie, either do it or eschew it.
The imagery doesn't work for me. I have
no explanation why.

 

[Brickjectivity]

This is how to write a politically themed poem....

The thing that most frightened old Putin,
ain't nuclear bombs we'd be shoot'n.
We Yanks were no threat.
Canucks made him sweat.
He had no defense against poutine.

Way to go, man!

Any constructive criticism, then?

Liked it.

Its a prose type poem. It has one meaning, not lots of meaning depending upon who reads it. Its got good imagery. I think that it would work in a chapter heading about political things. It would not fit into the film A Clockwork Orange or some interpretive thing.

 

[The Anointed]

This is how to write a politically themed poem....

The thing that most frightened old Putin,
ain't nuclear bombs we'd be shoot'n.
We Yanks were no threat.
Canucks made him sweat.
He had no defense against poutine.

This is how to write a politically themed 'LIMERICK' which is a five line poem.

There once was a Russian named Putin
Whose mouth he would oft put his footin
Which made him--- sick as can be
Cos it weren't gluten free
And Putin can't tolerate Gluten

 

[Father Heathen]

If you go for rhyming in poetry, tis best if
it's consistent, ie, either do it or eschew it.

Eh? It was: AABBCDDEEC

 

[Revoltingest]

This is how to write a politically themed 'LIMERICK' which is a five line poem.

There once was a Russian named Putin
Whose mouth he would oft put his footin
Which made him--- sick as can be
Cos it weren't gluten free
And Putin can't tolerate Gluten

Limerick....yes, I believe that I've heard
those 5 line doses of doggerel called that.

 

[Revoltingest]

Eh? It was: AABBCDDEEC

I acknowledge that poetry is very individual in how it's appreciated.
If I said anything useful, it was accidental.
If I said anything offensive....well, business as usual, eh.

 

[The Anointed]

I acknowledge that poetry is very individual in how it's appreciated.
If I said anything useful, it was accidental.
If I said anything offensive....well, business as usual, eh.

The revoltingness of Revoltingest is revolting to be sure
But Revoltingest’s revoltingness, is nothing but a lure
That he trolls around this forum in the hope that he might catch
A revolting person just like he, in fact, a perfect match.