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Rock bottom...

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by gnomon, Nov 19, 2017.

  1. gnomon

    gnomon Well-Known Member

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    I found the bottom...

    It's empty.

    No rock but it was always a stupid metaphor.

    But whatever:

    Where is the hope upon a wilted flower

    Time keeps the clock

    And the flower wilts.....

    I try so hard to stand up

    But there is the clock

    Checking off my time....

    And my time feels like it's wilting

    I look in your eyes

    And time stops.

    Existence stands still while I look in your eyes

    The flower is there

    As long as I see you and you see me

    Time can move forward

    And the flower will blossom.

    Coda. The bottom is empty.

    But the truth is that I will be inside you

    As you encompass me this night...

    And still there is no bottom......

    Bottom......

    Such a funny word.......

    Bottom.....

    Yet every deviant seeks it.

    Wait. What? This was a poem?

    I thought it was a fourth step.

    Or a new adventure.

    Figure it out for yourself.

    I'm just too damn tired.
     
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    England my lionheart Rockerjahili Rebel
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    what is a bottom
    if I say my bottom
    does that mean the bottom on my body
    or the bottom of my body
    why isn't our feet called our bottom

    time ticks slowly in the hull

    onward I say
     
  4. Tmac

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    Talk about poetic license, "it's empty" and then you proceed to fill the emptiness. Every deviant seeks it, I wonder how you know this?
     
  5. gnomon

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    Because I'm deviant?

    You did not know this?

    Welcome! Newcomer!
     
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