cobblestone

[dybmh]

cobblestone thoughts
under feet
float away
float away

mismatched
pockmarked
smoothly patterned
from distant gaze

night time
anxiety
worries came
wakened me

tossing sheets
dream spent
shaking off
unreality

woken up
edgy still
like bouncing off
a grinding wheel

thoughts today
unsettled still
cobwebs on a windy sill

it feels like
a wander-soul
starting on a journey home

eardrums spark
i lift up my head
someone crossed
this cobbled path

seems too busy
i’m too shy
i don’t smile
just say hi

my cobbled thoughts
can run amok
so head tucks in
fills with doubt

looking back
feelings hurt
eyes incline
toward the dirt

looking down
on cobblestone
my soul remembers
pressing down pressing down

stock against
grinding stones
scrap collected
on polished hones

cobblestone
boxed in trees
covered time
falling leaves

garden waking
early here
sun rays split
dew drop tears

i saw a video
of dad and son
dancing to a
frozen disney song

inspiring and
welcoming
like @Fool's words
on my profile wall

if I could write
a one line song
it would be

grateful not to be not alone

 

[Curious George]

cobblestone thoughts
under feet
float away
float away

mismatched
pockmarked
smoothly patterned
from distant gaze

night time
anxiety
worries came
wakened me

tossing sheets
dream spent
shaking off
unreality

woken up
edgy still
like bouncing off
a grinding wheel

thoughts today
unsettled still
cobwebs on a windy sill

it feels like
a wander-soul
starting on a journey home

eardrums spark
i lift up my head
someone crossed
this cobbled path

seems too busy
i’m too shy
i don’t smile
just say hi

my cobbled thoughts
can run amok
so head tucks in
fills with doubt

looking back
feelings hurt
eyes incline
toward the dirt

looking down
on cobblestone
my soul remembers
pressing down pressing down

stock against
grinding stones
scrap collected
on polished hones

cobblestone
boxed in trees
covered time
falling leaves

garden waking
early here
sun rays split
dew drop tears

i saw a video
of dad and son
dancing to a
frozen disney song

inspiring and
welcoming
like @Fool's words
on my profile wall

if I could write
a one line song
it would be

grateful not to be not alone

That is a good poem. Is there any particular reason you settled on "welcoming" in the 7th line from the bottom? Or would a different word with similar meaning have sufficed?

 

[dybmh]

That is a good poem. Is there any particular reason you settled on "welcoming" in the 7th line from the bottom? Or would a different word with similar meaning have sufficed?

Thank you.

I hadn't considered another word besides welcoming.

I'm open to suggestions. It's freshly written; I'm not committed to it.

I intended the poem to be about welcoming the cobblestones and letting them go.

 

[Curious George]

Thank you.

I hadn't considered another word besides welcoming.

I'm open to suggestions. It's freshly written; I'm not committed to it.

I intended the poem to be about welcoming the cobblestones and letting them go.

Maybe "inviting" the first and last syllables matching with "inspiring."

"Welcoming" breaks cadence and even stumbles a little in the place it is. I wasn't sure if that was intended as one can easily stumble on cobblestones. Still stumbling is not very welcoming so it creates an interesting disconnect. For me, I didn't like "welcoming;" then, I wasn't sure if I like "welcoming." So, I thought I would ask about it.