HAIKU thread

Revoltingest · Mar 25, 2012

Kathryn said:
I believe that haikus are only supposed to have three lines - 5-7-5. Is there something I don't know?

Wind across the fields
Pushing the clouds from the sky
And from my sad eyes.

Three lines, but way more complicated than that.
I gave up trying to understand their structure.
Those rascally Japanese....taking something which should be simple, & making it inscrutable.
The 5-7-5 refers to subdivisions of a syllable (mora).
Yet another reason the limerick is superior to the haiku.
The Revoltingest solution: If it seems haikuie, then it's a haiku.

Revoltingest · Mar 25, 2012

A difficult form has haiku.
Syllabic design they eschew
To cut up a word
into morae's absurd.
I can't figure out what to do.

monta · Mar 25, 2012

As far as I can ascertain without learning Japanese this is a haiku

if I bedazzle
it today, summer will start
at least on my blouse

and this isn't

I am a little
teapot short and stout, here is
my handle and spout

DreadFish · Mar 25, 2012

Concrete imagery is one of the fundamental parts to haiku. Little to no abstraction; it's supposed to basically give you a vivid mental image.

monta · Mar 25, 2012

DreadFish said:
Concrete imagery is one of the fundamental parts to haiku. Little to no abstraction; it's supposed to basically give you a vivid mental image.

You have to split apart it and mention the weather is alls I knows.

Secret Chief · Mar 28, 2012

I'm reading a haiku book at the moment. Here is one I particularly enjoy by John Brandi:

after the rain
bomb craters filled
with stars

Marble · Apr 6, 2012

Okay, so I'm not sure if acording to the rules this is a haiku but:

willow bending with the wind
twigs weep rain
life left me lonely

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